Thursday, January 8, 2015

1st Draft Reflection

Within my first draft, one thing that I did well was picking out good quotes that supports my argument. Second would be, introducing my quotes so the reader knows what I'm trying to explain. After introducing my quote, I'll interpret what it means after I stated it. For each paragraph I made sure, I made a statement onto my Assertion. During the anonymous revision, the person suggested that I should choose better word choices. One thing that my outline lacks was my thesis. I need try to connect it to my examples and describe it more thoroughly. I think reading my essay more than a couple times might help me develop it to be more fitting. Another would be, trying to develop my essay with more better word choices so it doesn't seems like I'm repeating myself. For it to be easier for me, I feel like I need to break down my outline so it's more organized. With that said, all of this will truly help me on being successful on writing my essay. The most challenging part of revising my first draft is to revise what my editor suggested me to do and to add it on to my essay.

3 comments:

  1. How can you make the thesis stronger? This is important for the rest of the paper.

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  2. As of right now, my thesis is a bit choppy. Meaning, i just need to revise or try to make it more appealing.

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  3. Okay- make sure the thesis statement fits the research you've done. As you do more research, your thesis will also evolve.

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